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    • synthesis

    • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
    • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
    • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
    • - New technologies are everywhere : multimedia, household electrical, phone, car, medical...
    • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
    • All products (computeur : macintosh ; touchpad: Ipad ; phone: Iphone ; Mp4 : Ipod but also applications).
  • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
  • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
  • Now, let's focus on the science evolution which leads me to my second part of the idea of progress.
  • - Scientific discoveries: physics, in astrology, in medicine, in genetics...
  • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
  • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
  • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
  • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
  • - subservience of the women : The Taming of the Shrew by Shakerspeare : how must be a wife with hen husband.
  • Modern woman : different customs because men and women become equal (family) Cooking, household, works, children...
  • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
  • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
  • To conclude, we can see that the progress affeting our life everyday in a lot of fields to allow us to live easily, learn or survive.
  • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
  • However, it stays some more of progress to be made concerning social inequalities.

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  • جملة 1
  • جملة 2
    • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
      صوّت الآن
    • Progress is made moveoving forward, made go towardsoving to an upper degree or, a regular evolution of the humanity, or the civilization towards an ideal aim.chieving a goal. What types of progress affect our lifeves?
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 2إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 2
  • جملة 3
    • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
      صوّت الآن
    • Firstly, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish,progress in science and lastly I'll talk about the evolution of social relationships'evolution.
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 3إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 3
  • جملة 4
  • جملة 5
    • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
      صوّت الآن
    • - manyA lot of improvements : in quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and, medicines, etc) incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his qualityhan needed. An example are the Apple products which many cannot live without nowadays.
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 5إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 5
  • جملة 6
  • جملة 7
    • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 7إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 7
  • جملة 8
    • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 8إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 8
  • جملة 9
  • جملة 10
  • جملة 11
    • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 11إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 11
  • جملة 12
    • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 12إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 12
  • جملة 13
    • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 13إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 13
  • جملة 14
    • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 14إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 14
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  • جملة 17
    • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 17إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 17
  • جملة 18
    • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
      صوّت الآن
    • إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 18إضافة تصحيح جديد - جملة 18
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  • جملة 21