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  • A writing exercise

  • ( This is an exercise for one IELTS test and this page includes the charts: https://www.ieltsessaybank.com/changes-in-annual-spending/ Thanks so much for correcting my text!!
    • :) The pie charts illustrate how school expenditures alter from 1981 to 2001.
    • The main items of school spending remain the same in the three decades, including teachers’ salaries, other workers’ salaries, resources like books, furniture and equipment, and insurance.
    • Over the years, teachers’ salaries remain the largest spending, rising steadily with a proportion from 40% to 50%.
  • Another spending item that keeps increasing is insurance.
    • Although it constitutes only the smallest fraction, it sees a rise from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001.
    • In comparison, other workers’ salaries has fallen from the second largest spending to the third, from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001.
    • Resources like books share the same proportion as furniture and equipment in 1981, at 15%, following teachers’ salaries and other workers’ salaries.
    • Afterwards, the expenditure on resources like books first rises to 20% in 1991 and then drops to merely 9%, while the fluctuation of furniture and equipment sees a reversed trend: it drops to 5% in 1991 and then bounces up to 23% during ten years, making it the second largest school spending in 2001.

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    • ( This is an exercise for one IELTS test and this page includes the charts: https://www.ieltsessaybank.com/changes-in-annual-spending/ Thanks so much for correcting my text!!
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    • The main items of school spending remain the same in the three decades, including teachers’ salaries, other workers’ salaries, resources like books, furniture and equipment, and insurance.
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    • The main items of school spending remain the same in theed constant over three decades, including teachers’ salaries, other workers’ salaries, resources likesuch as books, furniture and equipment, and insurance.
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    • Over the years, teachers’ salaries remain the largest spending, rising steadily with a proportion from 40% to 50%.
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    • Over the years, teachers’ salaries remained the largest source of spending, rising steadily withas a proportion from 40% to 50%.
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    • In comparison, other workers’ salaries has fallen from the second largest spending to the third, from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001.
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    • In comparison, other workers’ salaries has fallen from the second largest spending to thea third, from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001.
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    • Resources like books share the same proportion as furniture and equipment in 1981, at 15%, following teachers’ salaries and other workers’ salaries.
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    • Resources likesuch as books share the same proportionately the same as furniture and equipment in 1981, at 15%, following teachers’ salarieshe trend of teachers’ and other workers’ salaries.
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    • Afterwards, the expenditure on resources like books first rises to 20% in 1991 and then drops to merely 9%, while the fluctuation of furniture and equipment sees a reversed trend: it drops to 5% in 1991 and then bounces up to 23% during ten years, making it the second largest school spending in 2001.
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    • Afterwards, the expenditure on resources like booksuch as printed materials first rises to 20% in 1991 and then drops to merely 9%, while the fluctuation of furniture and equipment sees a reversed trend: it dropsa fall to 5% in 1991 and then bounces upa rebound to 23% during ten years, making it the second largest school spending item in 2001. ¶
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