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  • The most desirable place for visiting in my life it is California en general and particulary california hiils.
  • That dream and preferable point of destination have been chosen not by occasion, I have got firmly approvals in my mind and vigourously would find more than ten facts in a raw, that are going to be the foundation for such strong passion.
  • Firstly, accomplishing travelling to California provides me senses of entire fulfillment my childhood's passion about making at least one step onto US soil.
  • Naturally, from the more displaced point of observing, the travelling contributes to us opportunities to get acquainted with existed cultures and mentality, to increase number of friends and outstanding personalities, whose are being met during your life.
  • Moreover, in a reference to medical researchs, by changing the our place of habitant periodically we will get rid of depression in whole spectrum of her manifestations.
  • The second fact, by what I have been driving this idea, is after such powerful goals had been achieved, you start to realize that everything are possible in life.
  • In my point of view, life in US brightly represents us idea about truly liberation and settling own great plans into the right soil, because even the native Americans consider US firstly as a country of opportunities for all people.
  • Exactly those feasibilities I will use profoundly and with literacy, being aimed to settle my family here.
  • I feel the leverage and uplifting energy about realization my goals, and that comes along with wide area of opportunities and new knowledge that will bring me moving to California.
  • Thoughts and dreams are always intensifued and fostered by my vivid imagination of the future life here.
  • And actually the process of putting dreams into real has been starting and gradually with every next step will be increasingly accelerated, boost with forces ad unleashed more and more innate resources.

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    • That dream and preferable point of destination have been chosen not by occasion, I have got firmly approvals in my mind and vigourously would find more than ten facts in a raw, that are going to be the foundation for such strong passion.
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    • Firstly, accomplishing travelling to California provides me senses of entire fulfillment my childhood's passion about making at least one step onto US soil.
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    • Naturally, from the more displaced point of observing, the travelling contributes to us opportunities to get acquainted with existed cultures and mentality, to increase number of friends and outstanding personalities, whose are being met during your life.
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    • Moreover, in a reference to medical researchs, by changing the our place of habitant periodically we will get rid of depression in whole spectrum of her manifestations.
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    • The second fact, by what I have been driving this idea, is after such powerful goals had been achieved, you start to realize that everything are possible in life.
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    • In my point of view, life in US brightly represents us idea about truly liberation and settling own great plans into the right soil, because even the native Americans consider US firstly as a country of opportunities for all people.
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    • I feel the leverage and uplifting energy about realization my goals, and that comes along with wide area of opportunities and new knowledge that will bring me moving to California.
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    • And actually the process of putting dreams into real has been starting and gradually with every next step will be increasingly accelerated, boost with forces ad unleashed more and more innate resources.
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