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  • Alexandra. A science fiction story. Part VII

  • All we had to do was get out of the hyper, slow down, dock at the trans-shipment base, hand over the cargo - everything in five days.
    • But then an asteroid seems to be have “fallen”; out of nowhere.
  • Apparently, fate did not want us to fly safely to the port.
    • The ship’s AI went crazy, calculating of different possibilities in the minutes remaining before the collision, but it did not find a solution from the area of positive values.
    • It was a funny situation: perfect technology can still count the chances, but all is already clear to anyone-this is the end.
  • We had only one thing to do - climb into the rescue capsules, activate the ejection mode, and fly using autonomous engines as far from the ship as possible, and pray - either to space, or to the old, almost forgotten gods - that it would fly by safely and the fragments from ship’s explosion would not cross the trajectory movements of our capsules.
    • And then for a week or two we will suffer in the narrow box of the capsule with its autonomous support system - until the rescuers pick us up.
  • Then I remembered something about the escape capsules and my blood ran cold.
  • There were only two capsules on board and three people: my XO, the intern Alexa, and I.
  • Strangely enough, I was clearly aware of what was happening.
    • Although the psychologists still don’t believe me that it was not shock, but a conscious choice, when, having given the order to XO, I dragged Alexandra to the evacuation area with being in a sober mind.
    • The captain is the last to leave the vessel entrusted to him: an old rule that came from the planetary naval fleet.
  • We ran along the floor, which suddenly became slippery like that of an ice skating rink.
  • We then clung to each other and to everything that was at hand, just to stay on our feet and not fall.
  • I was afraid of only one thing - that Alexandra might not get to the rescue capsule herself, that she would be scared, hesitate, and as a result lose precious time and die.
  • I remember the look on her face.
  • When she realized that there was only one capsule, she stepped back.

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    • All we had to do was get out of the hyper, slow down, dock at the trans-shipment base, hand over the cargo - everything in five days.
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    • The ship’s AI went crazy, calculating of different possibilities in the minutes remaining before the collision, but it did not find a solution from the area of positive values.
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    • The ship’s AI went crazy, calculating of different possibilities in the minutes remaining before the collision, but it did not find a solution from the area of positive valuessolution.
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    • It was a funny situation: perfect technology can still count the chances, but all is already clear to anyone-this is the end.
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    • It was a funny situation: perfect technology can still count the chancalculate possibilities, but all iwas already clear to anyone- - this is the end.
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    • We had only one thing to do - climb into the rescue capsules, activate the ejection mode, and fly using autonomous engines as far from the ship as possible, and pray - either to space, or to the old, almost forgotten gods - that it would fly by safely and the fragments from ship’s explosion would not cross the trajectory movements of our capsules.
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    • And then for a week or two we will suffer in the narrow box of the capsule with its autonomous support system - until the rescuers pick us up.
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    • And tThen for a week or two we willould suffer in the narrow box of the capsule with its autonomous support system - until the rescuers picked us up.
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    • And then for a week or two we will suffered in the narrow box of the capsule with its autonomous support system - until the rescuers picked us up.
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    • Although the psychologists still don’t believe me that it was not shock, but a conscious choice, when, having given the order to XO, I dragged Alexandra to the evacuation area with being in a sober mind.
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    • Although the psychologists still don’t believe me that it was not shock, but a conscious choice, when, having given the order to XO, I dragged Alexandra to the evacuation area withhile being in a sober mind.
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    • I was afraid of only one thing - that Alexandra might not get to the rescue capsule herself, that she would be scared, hesitate, and as a result lose precious time and die.
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