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At the weekend my family and I went to the park. My dad and I played on the swings with my little sister.  I hope next weekend I can see the new Space World movie.  The highlight of the trip to the park was the wonderful picnic my mom prepared. Going to the park with my family is always a great time!

 

At the weekend my family and I went to the park. It was fun. I want to see the new Space World movie. My birthday is next week. I hope one day my parents let me have a dog. Well, that’s all I have to say.


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AussieInBg profile picture AussieInBgAugust 2020

Firstly (First), are you using British English or American English? For example, you are using "At the weekend" - British English ("On the weekend" is the American equivilant) and "mom" - American English ("mum" in British English). I'll correct with a bias towards British English, because there is more British than American English in your writing:

At the weekend my family and I went to the park. It was fun! The highlight of our trip to the park was the wonderful picnic my mum had prepared. My dad and I also played on the swings with my little sister. Going to the park with my family is always a great time!

I want to see the new Space World movie and my birthday is next week. One day I hope my parents let me have a dog. Well, that’s all I have to say.