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    • Racism is the Side Effect of Group System

    • The racism is a bad thing, everybody agree, but there is a interesting thing about racism, this is a side effect of system that create countries and cities.
    • A long time ago (millions of years), people start to create groups to survive, this is necessary because they need like people around them.
    • Without sympathy with others, you was not able to care your childrens, family, and so on (because you don’t care).
    • Without a group, you was not be able to create cities and countries in the way we live today, without this system, we maybe not became strong enought to be great as we usually are.
    • But don’t get me wrong, group is good thing, but on the other hand we create racism, the same system that create group, now is trying to separate people, the humankind is not perfect, I hope one day we can see our mistake, because we are not different at all.

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    • The racism is a bad thing, everybody agree, but there is a interesting thing about racism, this is a side effect of system that create countries and cities.
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    • The rRacism is a bad thing, everybody agrees, but there is an interesting thing about racism, ithis is a side effect of the system that has created countries and cities.
      100% GOOD (2 votes)
    • The racism is a bad thing, everybody agrees, but there is an interesting thing about racism,: this is a side effect of the system that create countries and cities.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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    • A long time ago (millions of years), people start to create groups to survive, this is necessary because they need like people around them.
      0% GOOD (1 votes)
    • A long time ago (mMillions of years) ago, people started to create groups to survive, this iwas necessary because they need liked people around them.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • A long time ago (millions of years), people started to create groups to survive, this is necessary because they need likesimilar people around them.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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    • Without sympathy with others, you was not able to care your childrens, family, and so on (because you don’t care).
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    • Without sympathyising with others, you wasere not able to care about your childrens, family, and so on (because you don’t care).
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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    • Without a group, you was not be able to create cities and countries in the way we live today, without this system, we maybe not became strong enought to be great as we usually are.
      투표하세요!
    • Without a group, you wasere not be able to create cities and countries in the way we live today,; without this system, we maybe we did not becaome strong enought to be great as we usually are.
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    • But don’t get me wrong, group is good thing, but on the other hand we create racism, the same system that create group, now is trying to separate people, the humankind is not perfect, I hope one day we can see our mistake, because we are not different at all.
      투표하세요!
    • But don’t get me wrong, group is a good thing, but on the other hand we create racism, by the same system thatwe create group, which now is trying to separate people, t. The humankind is not perfect, I hope one day we can see our mistake, because we are not different at all.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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