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    • Some people say that television is useful for education, while

    • Some would argue the Tv has benefits in education goals, While others said it is just for entertainment.
    • I believe that television has a huge impact on the education procedure.
    • On the one hand, almost all television production companies focus on amusement and bring enjoyment to the people.
    • If you searched, you would find a lot of movie types like Drama, Action, and Adventure films that do not include any educational purposes.
    • For example, Netflix released a year ago a hundred thousand Action movies.
    • However, I believe this does not contradict the important role of tv in teaching, and what can offer to it, and we can use it in the knowledge felids like entertainment industry to attract student and people.
    • On the other hand, Tv has all the tools to use it in the education targets, and it can make it fun and enjoyable in the teaching process.
    • For instance, The BBC movie called the earth was a big influence on people and scientists, because explain complicated issues in a simple way using new technology in the tv industry which make teaching attractive.
    • I believe the tv should use deep in the education process because will be simplified teaching and make it easy to understand.
    • In conclusion, although there is a big production in television entertainment, using tv in education still had benefits and a very useful method.
  • I Recommend using tv in all the fields of studying due to make the materials more fun and attractive to children and attract people to the knowledge too.

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    • Some would argue the Tv has benefits in education goals, While others said it is just for entertainment.
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    • Some would argue the Tv hasV benefits in education goals, Wwhile others saidy that it is just for entertainment.
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    • On the one hand, almost all television production companies focus on amusement and bring enjoyment to the people.
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    • On the one hand, almost all television production companies focus on amusement and bringing enjoyment to the people.
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    • If you searched, you would find a lot of movie types like Drama, Action, and Adventure films that do not include any educational purposes.
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    • If you searched, you would find a lot of movie types like Dgenres such as drama, Adction, and Aadventure films thatwhich do not include any educational purposescontent.
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    • However, I believe this does not contradict the important role of tv in teaching, and what can offer to it, and we can use it in the knowledge felids like entertainment industry to attract student and people.
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    • However, I believe this does not contradict theat an important role of tvTV ins teaching, and what can offer to it, and we can use it in the knowledge felids like entertainment industry. We can use other aspects of television broadcast content such as it being entertaining to attract students and peopleother people to more productive TV programming.
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    • On the other hand, Tv has all the tools to use it in the education targets, and it can make it fun and enjoyable in the teaching process.
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    • On the other hand, Tv has all the tools to use it in the education targets, and it can make it fun and enjoyable in the teaching processTV has all the tools needed to make the teaching process fun and enjoyable.
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    • For instance, The BBC movie called the earth was a big influence on people and scientists, because explain complicated issues in a simple way using new technology in the tv industry which make teaching attractive.
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    • For instance, The BBC movietelevision series called t"The eEarth" was a big influence on people and scientists, because it had explained complicated issues in a simple way by using new technology in the tvTV industry which make teachs learning attractive.
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    • I believe the tv should use deep in the education process because will be simplified teaching and make it easy to understand.
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    • I believe the tvat TV should use deepbe used substantially in the education process because will be simplified teachy learning and make itconcepts easy to understand.
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    • In conclusion, although there is a big production in television entertainment, using tv in education still had benefits and a very useful method.
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    • In conclusion, although there is aare big production inamounts of television entertainment produced, using tvTV in education still hadnevertheless has its benefits and ais very useful method.
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    • I Recommend using tv in all the fields of studying due to make the materials more fun and attractive to children and attract people to the knowledge too.
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