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    • The company which corporate culture I would like to talk about is called “Tinkoff”.
    • The company has the majority of market share in a wide variety of industries.
  • For example, the company also has insurance products for individuals and investment instruments, services for businesses and organizations, and serves as a mobile operator.
    • Although it’s a state-accredited bank with a large number of the strictest rules that their employees must obey, the company defines itself as not a bank but as an IT-company.
    • Thus, they should have some signs of innovative culture besides stable culture inherent in banking organizations.
    • Let’s have a closer look at how it is presented in five signs of organizational culture: mission statement, stories & language, physical layout, rules & policies, and rituals.
    • Mission statement The mission statement of the organization is: ”Our goal is to provide the best financial services in the world”.
    • They really go to great lengths to build and maintain an entire ecosystem of financial products that are available to their clients online 24/7.
    • They have online customer support and consulting department which is a couple of clicks away in the bank mobile application or web version.
    • Their employees in the support department are well trained and provide their services very quickly.
    • As a client it was very convenient for me to use their debit card, then I started buying insurance from them for travel abroad, and recently I opened a business account in this bank.
    • I find it is convenient for me to receive services in one or two mobile applications with similar interfaces and fast online support instead of going to other banks offline offices, stand in line, and comply with a bunch of formalities related to documents, checks, etc. Stories and language Unfortunately, I don’t know any stories the company uses to empower its employees and engage them with the company’s life and culture.
    • But what I have noticed is that when I did an internship in their sales department and there were a lot of technical words used even by salespersons.
    • As a company which infrastructure is closely tied to computers and cloud technology, I think that knowing all those ”bag”, ”firewall”, ”malware”, ”phishing” and ”SSL” helps employees from different departments to communicate effectively with each other and solve problems quicker.
  • Physical layout The organization is part on location and part remote.
    • In their headquarters in Moscow, they have a development department, design, and sales, but their customers support employees all working remotely from their homes in different cities of Russia.
    • In their headquarters, employees don’t have a dress code and their office is built in a manner of Google offices.
    • In the company canteen, all tables are the same so ordinary workers, managers and even sometimes board members chat with each other over a meal.
    • This helps the employees of this office work in a less stressed and less formal environment, avoid formalities in communication between employees of different levels and departments.
    • Rules and policies The company has a lot of instructions, especially regarding communication with clients and potential clients.
    • Since I know about the rules and policies of the sales department of this company, I will talk about them, but I am sure that in other departments such as the design or development department there are fewer job descriptions and bureaucracy.
    • Any financial and banking activity is strictly controlled by Central Bank of Russia, the employees of such organizations should be very careful when communicating with a client so as not to break the law.
  • All communication with clients takes place in a business manner and according to scripts written by Tinkoff company.
    • For almost any mistake that was noticed by the internal department of quality control of negotiations, the company deducts money from the salary.
    • There are a lot of instructions and during training 99% of the attention is paid precisely to memorizing, understanding, and using them.
    • Workers due to strict rules are less satisfied with their job than if they could show their creativity, but this helps the company to receive fewer lawsuits and complaints.
    • Rituals In the company, they have New Year corporate parties as well as Anniversary parties and other activities for each department where they reward the best employees and recognize their achievements in front of their peers.
    • Also, on Mondays managers gather with employees for a one-hour meeting to discuss plans and goals for a week and on Fridays, they summarize results of the week, what was done good and what needs to be fixed.
  • It helps the company to stay on track to achieve its long-term goals.

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    • For example, the company also has insurance products for individuals and investment instruments, services for businesses and organizations, and serves as a mobile operator.
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    • Although it’s a state-accredited bank with a large number of the strictest rules that their employees must obey, the company defines itself as not a bank but as an IT-company.
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    • Although it is a state-accredited bank with a large number of the strict rulest ruleselated to the banking industry that their employees must obey, the company defines itself as not a bank but as an IT-company.
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    • Thus, they should have some signs of innovative culture besides stable culture inherent in banking organizations.
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    • Thus, they should havAs a consequence, we would expect there to be some signs of an innovative culture besidesin contrast to the stable culturone inherent in banking organizations.
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    • Let’s have a closer look at how it is presented in five signs of organizational culture: mission statement, stories & language, physical layout, rules & policies, and rituals.
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    • Let’s hav us take a closer look at how it is presented insuch an innovative culture is present by examining five signs of organizational culture: mission statement, stories & language, physical layout, rules & policies, and rituals.
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    • Mission statement The mission statement of the organization is: ”Our goal is to provide the best financial services in the world”.
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    • Mission statement:
      The mission statement of the organization is: ”Our goal is to provide the best financial services in the world”.
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    • They really go to great lengths to build and maintain an entire ecosystem of financial products that are available to their clients online 24/7.
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    • They really go to great lengths to build and maintain an entire ecosystem of financial products that are available to their clients online 24/7.
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    • They have online customer support and consulting department which is a couple of clicks away in the bank mobile application or web version.
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    • They have an online customer support and consulting department which is only a couple of clicks away in the bank mobile application or web version.
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    • As a client it was very convenient for me to use their debit card, then I started buying insurance from them for travel abroad, and recently I opened a business account in this bank.
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    • As a client, it was very convenient for me to use their debit card, then. Consequently, I started buying insurance from them for travel abroad, and, recently I, opened a business account in this bankbanking account.
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    • I find it is convenient for me to receive services in one or two mobile applications with similar interfaces and fast online support instead of going to other banks offline offices, stand in line, and comply with a bunch of formalities related to documents, checks, etc. Stories and language Unfortunately, I don’t know any stories the company uses to empower its employees and engage them with the company’s life and culture.
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    • I find that it is convenient for me to receive services in one or two mobile applications with similar interfaces and fast online support instead of going to other banks offlinephysical offices, stand in ling in a queue, and complying with a bunchmassive number of formalities related to documents, checks, etc and so on

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      n’ not know any stories the company uses to empower its employees and engage them with the company’s life and culture.
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    • But what I have noticed is that when I did an internship in their sales department and there were a lot of technical words used even by salespersons.
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    • But wWhat I have noticed, however, is that when I did an internship in their sales department and, there were a lot of technical words used even by salespersonsople.
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    • As a company which infrastructure is closely tied to computers and cloud technology, I think that knowing all those ”bag”, ”firewall”, ”malware”, ”phishing” and ”SSL” helps employees from different departments to communicate effectively with each other and solve problems quicker.
      Vote now!
    • As a company whicith infrastructure is closely tied to computers and cloud technology, I think that knowing all thosend understanding IT jargon such as ”bag”, ”firewall”, ”malware”, ”phishing” and ”SSL” helps employees from different departments to communicate effectively with each other and solve problems quicker.
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    • In their headquarters in Moscow, they have a development department, design, and sales, but their customers support employees all working remotely from their homes in different cities of Russia.
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    • In their headquarters in Moscow, they have a development department, design, and sales, but their customers support employees are all working remotely from their homes in different cities of Russia.
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    • In their headquarters, employees don’t have a dress code and their office is built in a manner of Google offices.
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    • In their headquarters, employees don’t have athere is no dress code and t. Their office iss are built in athe manner of Google officesthose of Google.
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    • In the company canteen, all tables are the same so ordinary workers, managers and even sometimes board members chat with each other over a meal.
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    • In the company canteen, all tables are the same so. This means that ordinary workers, managers and even sometimes board members are able to chat with each other over a meal.
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    • This helps the employees of this office work in a less stressed and less formal environment, avoid formalities in communication between employees of different levels and departments.
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    • This helps theassists employees of this office to work in a less stressed and less formal environment, avoid formalities in communication and to avoid communicative barriers in communication such as formality between employees of different levels and departments.
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    • Rules and policies The company has a lot of instructions, especially regarding communication with clients and potential clients.
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    • Rules and policies:
      The company has a lot of instructions
      , - especially regarding communication with clients and potential clients.
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    • Since I know about the rules and policies of the sales department of this company, I will talk about them, but I am sure that in other departments such as the design or development department there are fewer job descriptions and bureaucracy.
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    • Since I know about the rules and policies of the sales department of this company, I will talk about them, but I am surecertain that in other departments, such as the design or development department, that there are fewer job descriptions and less bureaucracy.
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    • Any financial and banking activity is strictly controlled by Central Bank of Russia, the employees of such organizations should be very careful when communicating with a client so as not to break the law.
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    • Any financial and banking activity is strictly controlled by Central Bank of Russia, meaning that the employees of such organizations should be very careful when communicating with a client so as not to break the law.
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    • For almost any mistake that was noticed by the internal department of quality control of negotiations, the company deducts money from the salary.
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    • For almost any mistake that was noticed by the internal department of quality control of negotiations, the company deducts money from the employee's salary.
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    • There are a lot of instructions and during training 99% of the attention is paid precisely to memorizing, understanding, and using them.
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    • There are a lot of instructions and during training 99% of the attention is paid precisely to memorizing, understanding, and using them.
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    • Workers due to strict rules are less satisfied with their job than if they could show their creativity, but this helps the company to receive fewer lawsuits and complaints.
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    • Workers, due to the company's strict rules, are less satisfied with their job than if they could show their creativity, but this helps. However, such strictness results in the company to receiveing fewer lawsuits and complaints.
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    • Rituals In the company, they have New Year corporate parties as well as Anniversary parties and other activities for each department where they reward the best employees and recognize their achievements in front of their peers.
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    • Rituals:
      In the company, they have New Year corporate parties as well as Anniversary parties and other activities for each department where they reward the best employees and recognize their achievements in front of their peers.
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    • Also, on Mondays managers gather with employees for a one-hour meeting to discuss plans and goals for a week and on Fridays, they summarize results of the week, what was done good and what needs to be fixed.
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    • Also, on Mondays, managers gather with employees for a one-hour meeting to discuss plans and goals for athat week and on Fridays, they summarize the results of the week, what was done goodwell and what needs to be fiximproved.
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