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  • Healthcare obesity problem.

    • Over the last 20 years we have seen organizations trying to tackle the increasing problem of obesity , one solution on the table is to usher in a more strict program of physical education in the school curriculum.
    • In the following paragraphs, I will explore the causes as well as the explanation of my own viewpoint for this issue.
    • As for the causes of overweight there is a study published by the University of Cambridge saying that 70% of our body constitution depends on our diet, 20% is attributed to how much a person exercises, finally 10% relies on (accounts for) genetic factors.
    • Another blatant reason for this is the inadequate eat and run culture especially in big cities where nobody has enough time to inform themselves about the products, we are consuming furthermore to prepare a meal rich in nutrients.
    • Taking the previous data into account I firmly believe that more exercise would not benefit as much as an educational food program, giving proper directions to people on what to eat in order to stay healthy.
    • On the same note, the Mexican government imposed stiffen regulations for labeling products therefore everyone will be able to identify what are the possible risks of eating every type of aliments particularly junk and plain food.
    • To sum up, if we want to address the obesity problem the best way to do it would be better and prompt information about the food we ingest, increasing the amount of exercise is not necessarily beneficial.
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    • Over the last 20 years we have seen organizations trying to tackle the increasing problem of obesity , one solution on the table is to usher in a more strict program of physical education in the school curriculum.
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    • Over the last 20 years we have seen organizations trying to tackle the increasing problem of obesity , o. One solution on the table is to usher in a more strict program of physical education in the school curriculum.
    • Over the last 20 years we have seen organizations trying to tackle the increasing problem of obesity , one solution on the table is to usher in a more stricngent program of physical education in the school curriculums.
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    • As for the causes of overweight there is a study published by the University of Cambridge saying that 70% of our body constitution depends on our diet, 20% is attributed to how much a person exercises, finally 10% relies on (accounts for) genetic factors.
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    • As for the causes of overweight, there is a study published by the University of Cambridge saying that 70% of our body constitution depends on our diet, 20% is attributed to how much a person exercises, finally 10% relies on (accounts for) genetic factors.
    • As for the causes of overweightbesity there is a study published by the University of Cambridge sayconcluding that 70% of our body's constitution depends on our diet, whilst a further 20% is attributed to how much a person exercises,exercise a person does, with the finally 10% relies on (accounts for)being attributed to genetic factors.
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    • Another blatant reason for this is the inadequate eat and run culture especially in big cities where nobody has enough time to inform themselves about the products, we are consuming furthermore to prepare a meal rich in nutrients.
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    • Another blatant reason for this is the inadequate eat and run culture - especially in big cities where nobody has enough time to inform themselves about the products, we are consuming f. Furthermore, people seem not to have the time to prepare a meals rich in nutrients.
    • Another blatant reason for this is the inadequate eat and run culture especially in big cities where nobody has enough time to informeducate themselves about the products, that we are consuming, furthermore, busy people lack the time to prepare a meal rich in nutrients.
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    • Taking the previous data into account I firmly believe that more exercise would not benefit as much as an educational food program, giving proper directions to people on what to eat in order to stay healthy.
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    • Taking the previous data from the University of Cambridge into account, I firmly believe that more exercise would not be of benefit as much as an educational food program, giving proper directions to people on what to eat in order to stay healthy.
    • TakUsing the previous data into accountpublished by the University of Cambridge I firmly believe that more exercise would not benefit as much as an educational food program, giving proper directions and information to people on what to eat in order to stay healthy.
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    • On the same note, the Mexican government imposed stiffen regulations for labeling products therefore everyone will be able to identify what are the possible risks of eating every type of aliments particularly junk and plain food.
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    • On the same note, the Mexican government imposed stiffen regulations for labeling products thereforeso that everyone willould be able to identify what are the possible risks of eating every type of aliments particularly junk and plain food in relation to potential ailments.
    • On the same note, the Mexican government have imposed stiffmore stringent regulations foron the labelling of products twhereforeby everyone will be able to identify what are the possible risks of eating every type of aliments particularly junk and plain food. particular foods such as junk and plain food with associated risks for potential ailments
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    • To sum up, if we want to address the obesity problem the best way to do it would be better and prompt information about the food we ingest, increasing the amount of exercise is not necessarily beneficial.
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    • To sum up, if we want to address the obesity problem, the best way to do it would be better and prompt information about the food we ingest, iconsume. Increasing the amount of exercise is not necessarily beneficial.
    • To sum upmarise, if we want to address the obesity problem the best way to do it would be better and prompteducation along with information about the food we ingest, increasing the amount of exercise ismay not be necessarily beneficial.
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