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Text from Maryam1987 - English

    • Would you please correct my text? Thank you so much!

    • It seems that in the current era, stress has had a negative effect on people’s lives so to address this, some psychologies claim that stress disorder could be reduced by remaining silent and doing nothing occasionally.
  • I completely agree with this statement based on some rational reasons which I will discuss in the following essay.
  • There are two predominant reasons why doing nothing could be beneficial to mitigate stress.
    • Firstly, as most people have become obsessed with their problematical lifestyles and do not pay attention to their mental health, taking a break could be extremely useful.
  • Take an employee who has to deal with the forthcoming presentation as a patently obvious example; if he only takes a 30-minute break and has a cup of tea, not only could it take his concern, but it could also relieve unnecessary tension.
    • Indeed, they are more likely to perform better than they would not do it in the workplace.
    • Secondly, it might be said what the vast majority of people suffer from is over though.
  • In other words, not only would focusing too much on problems of life not enable people to find a direct solution, but it could also make the circumstance much more complicated and consume a large amount of energy.
  • Thus, spending sufficient time for thinking and analyzing the task may help individuals to release additional tension.
  • Nevertheless, psychologists strongly recommend that people with symptoms of a stress disorder such as anxiety require specific certain times of relaxation during days.
  • They highlight that one of the indispensable approaches for coping with stress is meditation.
  • This mental exercise offers a powerful mindset for individuals with different abilities, which allows them to step outside their psychological boundaries for a short period of time.
  • Furthermore, in this way, people would be subconsciously aware of the importance of living in the present moment.
    • Some philosophers believe that a wide range of humankind’s problems is rooted in their thought about the past or the future.
  • This means that this practice may assist them in better control of their stressful thoughts.
  • In conclusion, it can be conveyed that although humans are struggling with a busy lifestyle, they can more enjoy their life by giving up their daily involvements and pessimistic thoughts sometimes during days.

МОЛЯ, ПОМОГНЕТЕ ДА КОРИГИГИРАМЕ ВСЯКО ИЗРЕЧЕНИЕ! - English