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• Today i’m going to talk about my life.

• I’m from Brazil and i’m 16 years old, and i study engineering (actually it is building technician) I want to be fluent in English, because i think it is a cool, useful and a simple language, and me and my dad are planning a trip to the U.S. to about 2022 I love listen to Quenn/Freddy Mercury, classic rock, Modern Talking, eletronic and some more.

• I live with my mom and my aunt since my grandfather died, we’re all good, my mom work in a clothing store and my aunt is retired, and i just study, i worked in a supermarket a few months ago, but i was fired (unfortunately) My dad, he lives in Curitiba, about 200Km from where i live, i was with him a few weeks ago, when it’s possible, i go to there to visit and maybe walk arround the city.

• My dream job is become a pilot, almost getting paid to look through a window, but i have a few ideas to work on, like a police officer, a lawyer or an engineer.

• The ”TH” pronounce that was hard for me learn, my english teacher said that is like the ”F” sound in portuguese, and i was saying ”Fhat, Fhe, Fhrough”, that was weird, but now i know ho to say it (kinda) correctly.

• And for today it’s all, if you’re correcting this text, thank you so much. Bye