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    • Could you correct my CV??

  • RE: Laboratory Analyst As a senior year Msc student in chemical & petroleum engineering at the University of ---, I was excited to apply for laboratory Analyst at --- Inc..
  • ----- Inc. is a prominent company in analytical and field laboratory services industry, and as a highly motivated candidate with collaborative attitude, I would like to seize this opportunity working at -----Inc.’s new laboratory located in ----.
  • As a graduate researcher, I had lab-based research experience for approximately 2 years.
  • The subject of the research is rheological behavior of the viscosity of solvent/bitumen mixtures.
    • Also, since I was in undergraduate program, I have had broadened my perspective and expertise by studying various topics in Petroleum and Chemical Engineering.
  • Additionally, I increased industry knowledge about upstream and midstream of oil and gas field through 3 months training program at ---- office controlling --- gas plant in ---- as well as strong academic knowledge.
  • Along with knowledge in oil and gas field, I also developed teamwork skills in collaborative environment during 2 years Petroleum student club activities.
  • During the club activities, I translated a part of petroleum books in Korean and our team combined and organized the contents of books together which allow me to learn how to manage time and how to be team-oriented.
  • Also, through continues meetings with supervisor and co-supervisor, I comprehended their needs correctly and applied their feedbacks quickly to my research with my strong communication skill.
    • I would like to contribute my research and teamwork skills learned through my previous experience to --- Inc..
    • I have included my resume for your consideration.
    • And I am looking forward to discussing this position further.
  • Sincerely, In Young Park

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    • RE: Laboratory Analyst As a senior year Msc student in chemical & petroleum engineering at the University of ---, I was excited to apply for laboratory Analyst at --- Inc..
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    • ----- Inc. is a prominent company in analytical and field laboratory services industry, and as a highly motivated candidate with collaborative attitude, I would like to seize this opportunity working at -----Inc.’s new laboratory located in ----.
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    • Also, since I was in undergraduate program, I have had broadened my perspective and expertise by studying various topics in Petroleum and Chemical Engineering.
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    • Also, since I was in my undergraduate program, I have had broadened my perspective and expertise by studying various topics in Petroleum and Chemical Engineering.
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    • Additionally, I increased industry knowledge about upstream and midstream of oil and gas field through 3 months training program at ---- office controlling --- gas plant in ---- as well as strong academic knowledge.
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    • Along with knowledge in oil and gas field, I also developed teamwork skills in collaborative environment during 2 years Petroleum student club activities.
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    • During the club activities, I translated a part of petroleum books in Korean and our team combined and organized the contents of books together which allow me to learn how to manage time and how to be team-oriented.
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    • Also, through continues meetings with supervisor and co-supervisor, I comprehended their needs correctly and applied their feedbacks quickly to my research with my strong communication skill.
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