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    • Walking is an amazing activity, it's important to walk no less than 20 minutes daily in order to keep our health in a good condition.
    • Everyday we must walk to go shoping, to take our animal pet outdor, or simply to have a rest moment in a public garden.
    • Why walking can keep our body in a good health condition?
    • In fact, there are some studies which proove that walking can stimulate our blood circulation and it can improve our breathing, it helps us to go against of the dailylife stress.
    • Personnaly I try to have a routine to walk every day but I sincerely admet that it is more difficult than we thing specialy in a croud city and the modern lifestyle.

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    • Walking is an amazing activity, it's important to walk no less than 20 minutes daily in order to keep our health in a good condition.
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    • Walking is an amazing activity, i. It's important to walk noat lessast than 20 minutes a daily in order to keep our health in a good conditionstay healthy.
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    • Everyday we must walk to go shoping, to take our animal pet outdor, or simply to have a rest moment in a public garden.
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    • Everyday, we must walk to go shoping, to take our animal pet outdor, or simply to have a rest moment of rest in a public garden.
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    • Everyday we must walk to go shopping, to take our animalbring our pets outdor, side, or simply to have a rest moment of rest in a public garden.
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    • In fact, there are some studies which proove that walking can stimulate our blood circulation and it can improve our breathing, it helps us to go against of the dailylife stress.
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    • In fact, there are some studies which proove that walking can stimulate our blood circulation and it can improve our breathing, it helps us to go againstlet go of the daily life stress.
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    • In fact, there are some studies which proove that walking can stimulate our blood circulation and it can improve our breathing, it helps us to go againsting to ease the stress of theour daily life stresves.
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    • Personnaly I try to have a routine to walk every day but I sincerely admet that it is more difficult than we thing specialy in a croud city and the modern lifestyle.
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    • Personnaly I try to have a routine to walk every day, but I sincerely admeit that it is more difficult than we thing especialy in a crouwded city and because of the modern lifestyle.
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    • Personnally, I try to havmake a routine tohabit of walking every day but, though I sincerely admeit that it is more difficult than we thing may think. Especially in a crouwded city and the, where we live a very modern lifestyle.
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