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Text from ahmet_akta - English

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  • Hello my name is Ahmet.
  • I'm from Istanbul.
    • I'm studying manufacturing Engineering.I'm living in my home at school Time and I'm living with my family in Holiday.My hobbies are learning philosophy, literature ,science documentary and travel new cities ,cooking, spend a time with my friends,writing,thinking.Money is a tool for living.The live is not irritating and life is pretty.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • About correction...¶
      Ahmet - I am going to prepare a suggested re-working of your original text and place ALL of it in this box (ie, the Title box); it's more sensible than parsing your original work one sentence at a time (I find this "aspect" of PGC editorial assistance most irritating and a bit useless, per my opinion as an academician and technical editor for 35+ years). So here we go:¶

      First: "About correction", ie, your original title, makes no sense given the brief essay that follows. Since a "title" is likely "required" by the PG system, I'd suggest, in your case, a generic statement, e.g., A Statement for Correction" or "Please Correct My Statement", etc.¶

      Okay, now your essay:¶

      Hello. I'm studying manufacturing engineering. ¶

      When school is in session I live in the vicinity of the school, but during holidays I go home and stay with my family. ¶

      My hobbies include the study of philosophy, literature, science, documentary films, travel, cooking, enjoying leisure activities with my friends, and writing. ¶

      I regard money as a tool for living.¶

      Life is wonderful and is something that should be enjoyed.
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    • I'm studying manufacturing Engineering.I'm living in my home at school Time and I'm living with my family in Holiday.My hobbies are learning philosophy, literature ,science documentary and travel new cities ,cooking, spend a time with my friends,writing,thinking.Money is a tool for living.The live is not irritating and life is pretty.
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    • I'm studying manufacturing Eand engineering. I'm living in my home ate on my own during the school Timeterm and I'm living with my family in Hduring the holiday.s. My hobbies are learning philosophy, literature , science documentary and traveling to new cities , cooking, spending a time with my friends, writing, thinking. Money is a tool for living.The live is not irritating and life is pretty Life is free of trouble and positive.
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