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- My first text
- Hi, I'm Mary and I want to speak english so good.
- I live in Saint Peresburg (Russia).
- My dream is to live in Europe because I understend that a life in there is better.
- It is my main reason and motivation to learn english.
- I and my husbant together traveled to Czheh republic, Finland and The Netherlands.
- We saw how to can live in different.
- I want to live same.
- I just want to keep a quite life and don't affraid of the next day.
- I understand that my english don't enought even for a simple work, so I'm here.
I have a good job in Russia.
- I'm video editer and I really like my job, but I can't to say same about my country.
- It is really sad.
- So, I will to improve my english for the first time, and will to write in here my thoughts, like at diary.
- I am sorry about so sad text.
- I'm just desperate.
- Have a good day!

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- My fFirst ~~text~~ English-language Text¶
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- Hi, I'm Mary and I want to speak english so good.
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- Hi, I'm Mary and I want to speak eEnglish ~~so good~~.
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- Hi, I'm Mary and I want to speak eEnglish ~~so good~~with a high level of proficiency.
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- Hi~~, I'm~~. My name is Mary and I w~~ant~~ould like to be able to speak eEnglish ~~so good.~~well.¶
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- I live in Saint Peresburg (Russia).
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- I live in Saint Peteresburg (Russia).
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- I live in Saint Peteresburg ~~(Russia).~~, Russia.¶
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  (nb: Russian Federation, to be precise)¶
  (nb: personally, I still prefer to call it Leningrad)
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- My dream is to live in Europe because I understend that a life in there is better.
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- My dream is to live in Europe because I understeand that a life inover there is better.
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- MyI dream ~~is to~~of living in Europe where, if I understand correctly, life is better.¶
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  (nb: political aside -- I live in "Europe ~~because I understend that a lif~~" -- France to be precise; is life 'better" in Europe / The EU? Hm. I can compare "life" in France to living in America (Chicago, Washington DC, and Los Angeles) and the CCCP (Odessa and Sevastopol, many many years ago). Life in Europe can be better if you reside in certain states, worse if you reside in other~~e is better~~s. But know that "living in The EU", anywhere, is rather expensive when compared to living in RF, although living in/near St P, you're already in one of the most expensive parts of RF.
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- It is my main reason and motivation to learn english.
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- It is my main reason and motivation to learn eEnglish.
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- I and my husbant together traveled to Czheh republic, Finland and The Netherlands.
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- I and my husbantd together traveled to Czhech republic, Finland, and Tthe Netherlands.
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- ~~I and m~~My husbantd and I travelled together ~~traveled~~ to Czhech rRepublic, Finland and Tthe Netherlands.
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- ~~I and m~~My husbant ~~together~~and I have traveled to Czhech rRepublic, Finland, and The Netherlands.¶
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- We saw how to can live in different.
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- We saw how to ~~can~~ live in differently.
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- We saw how towe can live in differently.
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- We saw how ~~to can live in different.~~different life could be.¶
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  (nb: to less extent "different" in Czech republic, which IMO is still fraught with trappings of Soviet Times. Don't get me wrong: I like the more raditional ways of Slavic culture as compared to how folks conduct themselves in The EU States. OTOH, you coldn;t pay me to live in Finland, not to mention The Baltic States.)
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- I want to live same.
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- I want to live ~~same~~like that.
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- ~~I want~~This is the way I would like to live ~~same~~.
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- I just want to keep a quite life and don't affraid of the next day.
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- I just want to ~~keep~~live a quite life and ~~don't~~never be affraid of the next day.
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- I just want to ~~keep~~have a quitet life and ~~don't~~not being affraid of the next day.
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- ~~I just want to keep a quite life and don't affraid of the next day~~All I want is to enjoy a life that is quiet and in which I needn't be in constant fear regarding what might happen tomorrow.
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- I understand that my english don't enought even for a simple work, so I'm here.
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- I understand that my eEnglish ~~don'~~is not enought even for a simple ~~work~~job, so I'm here.
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- ~~I understand that my english don't enought even for a simple work, so I'm here.~~Realizing that my current level of English proficiency is not sufficient for even a low-skill job in Europe, I'm still in Russia.¶
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  (nb: this is not accurate -- have you considered work in Poland? Poland is an EU State in which many persons of formerly Soviet States, Ukrainians in particular but also Russians, Belorus, and EastGermans, are able to find employment)
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- I have a good job in Russia.
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- I'm video editer and I really like my job, but I can't to say same about my country.
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- I'm a video editeror, and I really like my job, but I can't to say the same about my country.
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- I'm video editeor and I really ~~like~~enjoy my job, but I can't to say the same about my country.
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- It is really sad.
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- It is really/truly sad.
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- It is really sad.¶
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- So, I will to improve my english for the first time, and will to write in here my thoughts, like at diary.
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- So, I will to improve my eEnglish for the first time, and will to write in here my thoughts, like atmy diary.
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- So, for the first time I will to improve my eEnglish ~~for the first time,~~ and I will to write ~~in here~~ my thoughts in here, like at diary.
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- So, ~~I will to~~as I begin work on improveing my eEnglish ~~for the first time, and will to write in here my thoughts, like~~, I will at the same time record my thoughts, as if I am keeping at diary, here.
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- I am sorry about so sad text.
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- I am sorry ~~about so sad text~~that my first written contribution to this community is so sad, but I am in a desperate situation.
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- I'm just desperate.
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- Have a good day!
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- Have a good/great day!
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- Have a good day! ¶
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  nb: "Have a good day." is fine, and needn't be "aggrandized" to "great", a word that is UTTERLY OVERUSED by English speakers native and non-native. Ugh ... "great" ... wish the word had never been coined. There is also a very "American" expression that gets at the same sentiment, i.e., "Have a nice day.", though this statement, too, is regarded by many (native) English speakers as a tad "trite" and (also) overused, much as is the phrase "Have a great day.".)¶
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  Or you could be "very British" and use "Have a happy!"
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