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    • A factory in my commuity

    • I think that it would be great if some company announced that it is going to build a factory next to my community because it would provide many advantages for people living there.
  • The first advantage is that a large factory brings many jobs with it that would be a good chance for unemployed people from my community to find employment.
  • A large factory always needs many people to keep it working.
  • Usually besides engineers factories in need of truck drivers, security people, cleaners so not educated people would be applied as well as highly educated people.
  • I think approximately a thousand people would get a new job.
  • The second plus to my community is that a large factory needs a good system of roads, so I think an emerge of a factory in my community would come with new roads.
  • The situation with roads in my community is a big problem because they’re very in a very bad state.
  • I believe that a factory would not have a choice but to repair the old roads and to build the new ones.
  • There can also be disadvantages like pollution.
  • Many factories don’t care about the nature and health of people that are nearby them.
  • Pollution can lead to very dangerous diseases such as cancer.
  • There is the city near my town called Magnitogorsk which is famous for its high rate of pollution.
  • There is always smoke on the streets of the city which is breathed by its citizens.
  • I would not wish such a destiny to my community.
  • Whatever, I believe that the problem can be solved by integrating anti-pollution systems at a factory.
  • One more disadvantage of a factory in my community would be a great noise it makes.
  • As we all know it is always very noisy near large factories because of large working machines, trucks, trains and etc. The problem would be a big one for people who would live next to the factory.
  • In closing, I think that the appearance of a factory in my community would make people happy in spite of possible disadvantages because a factory would bring with it solutions to many problems the community has.

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    • I think that it would be great if some company announced that it is going to build a factory next to my community because it would provide many advantages for people living there.
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    • I think that it would be a great if some company announced that development to my community is going tof companies build at factoryies next to my community because it would provide many advantages for people living there.
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    • The first advantage is that a large factory brings many jobs with it that would be a good chance for unemployed people from my community to find employment.
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    • Usually besides engineers factories in need of truck drivers, security people, cleaners so not educated people would be applied as well as highly educated people.
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    • The second plus to my community is that a large factory needs a good system of roads, so I think an emerge of a factory in my community would come with new roads.
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    • As we all know it is always very noisy near large factories because of large working machines, trucks, trains and etc. The problem would be a big one for people who would live next to the factory.
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    • In closing, I think that the appearance of a factory in my community would make people happy in spite of possible disadvantages because a factory would bring with it solutions to many problems the community has.
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