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  • Please help me to correct some parts of my motivational letter,

    • During my studies, I already focussed on subjects that tackled emergency and critical care nursing for instance “Families which experienced how their relative was resuscitated” or “Problems with advanced care directives in emergency situations” as these topics interested me the most.
  • Moreover, I especially liked the internships on an emergency ward and, during my vocational training, the time on the intensive care unit where you have to react quickly and appropriately to save the patient’s life and take care of patients in complex nursing situations.
  • For correct reactions, emergency and critical care nurses need to be well educated and trained with highly professional competences.
  • Therefore I would like to expand my knowledge and gain profound experience in Critical Care Nursing by undertaking this Master Degree.
  • This study programme provides clinical training and theoretical background so that I can work both on my knowledge and my practical skills which are very important for constantly improving me as a nurse and providing health care in the best possible way.
  • In the future, I can imagine working as a nursing expert in various emergency or intensive care settings.
  • My aspiration is to work in a hospital or other health institutions as an advanced practice nurse to establish evidence-based nursing by adapting scientifically grounded, current findings to the institutions to provide the optimal health care to patients for a speedy and complete recovery.
    • Another interesting work field would be the assistance, organisation and coordination of transporting critically ill patients to an institution where they receive appropriate and the best possible health care in accordance with their health conditions.
  • Besides, I would like to volunteer for humanitarian organisations, e. g.
  • “Doctors without Borders” or “Mercyship”, educating nurses in third world countries and implementing evidence-based processes for critical care nursing into their system.
  • The Master programme would assist me to reach that goal sharpening my intercultural skills since I study in other countries with people from various cultural backgrounds.
  • In addition to the intercultural, social and professional skills that I would sharpen through this study programme, I would like to gain more competencies in flexibility and integration by changing the university during the programme.
  • According to my future plans and my goals, I would like to study the first semester at the “Escola ...” because this school focuses on adult and geriatric care just like my present main emphasis.
  • Afterwards, I would like to spend the next semesters in E. and write my master thesis there because this university has advanced learning centres for simulation and evidence-based practise allowing me to practise critical care situations in their simulations and educating me in critical thinking and crisis resource management at the same time.
  • However, I am flexible concerning the preferred study track and mobility because almost every offered module of the programme interests me and all institutions seem to have strong competencies in Critical Care Nursing.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • During my studies, I already focussed on subjects that tackled emergency and critical care nursing for instance “Families which experienced how their relative was resuscitated” or “Problems with advanced care directives in emergency situations” as these topics interested me the most.
    • During my studies, I already focussed on subjects that tackled emergency and critical care nursing, for instance, “Families which experienced how their relative was resuscitated” or “Problems with advanced care directives in emergency situations”, as these topics interested me the most.
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    • Moreover, I especially liked the internships on an emergency ward and, during my vocational training, the time on the intensive care unit where you have to react quickly and appropriately to save the patient’s life and take care of patients in complex nursing situations.
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    • This study programme provides clinical training and theoretical background so that I can work both on my knowledge and my practical skills which are very important for constantly improving me as a nurse and providing health care in the best possible way.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
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    • My aspiration is to work in a hospital or other health institutions as an advanced practice nurse to establish evidence-based nursing by adapting scientifically grounded, current findings to the institutions to provide the optimal health care to patients for a speedy and complete recovery.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
    • Another interesting work field would be the assistance, organisation and coordination of transporting critically ill patients to an institution where they receive appropriate and the best possible health care in accordance with their health conditions.
    • Another interesting work field would be the assistance, organisation and coordination of transporting of critically ill patients to an institution where they can receive the most appropriate and the best possible health care in accordance with their health conditions.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8
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    • “Doctors without Borders” or “Mercyship”, educating nurses in third world countries and implementing evidence-based processes for critical care nursing into their system.
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  • Sentence 11
    • The Master programme would assist me to reach that goal sharpening my intercultural skills since I study in other countries with people from various cultural backgrounds.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 11
  • Sentence 12
    • In addition to the intercultural, social and professional skills that I would sharpen through this study programme, I would like to gain more competencies in flexibility and integration by changing the university during the programme.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12
  • Sentence 13
    • According to my future plans and my goals, I would like to study the first semester at the “Escola ...” because this school focuses on adult and geriatric care just like my present main emphasis.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13
  • Sentence 14
    • Afterwards, I would like to spend the next semesters in E. and write my master thesis there because this university has advanced learning centres for simulation and evidence-based practise allowing me to practise critical care situations in their simulations and educating me in critical thinking and crisis resource management at the same time.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14
  • Sentence 15
    • However, I am flexible concerning the preferred study track and mobility because almost every offered module of the programme interests me and all institutions seem to have strong competencies in Critical Care Nursing.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 15