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    • Evan was born in Puerto la Cruz, Venezuela in 1995, his mother was Venezuelan (until she was killed in a robbery when Evan was 15 years old), his father Michael, also Venezuelan, spent almost his whole life living in Red County.
    • When Evan's mother died, his father called him and said that he would bring him to Red County in a few weeks, meanwhile he had to stay with his aunt, María.
    • A few weeks later he was talking about his mother's death in his father's house.
    • Evan's father was a humble carpenter who arrived to Red County looking for job opportunities in the late 99', due the crisis that he saw coming with the victory of Hugo Chavez in the presidential elections.
    • He settled down without problems and carried on his life alone until he called his son.
    • Evan's father used to call him to do some carpentry, Evan was the one who carried the wood and because of that he developed a great acquired strength.
    • He likes to read, listen to music and practice martial arts in his backyard.
    • Evan grew up seeing police series on the television, and he swore himself that he would become one.
    • Something like his mother's death cannot happen again if he can avoid it.

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    • Evan was born in Puerto la Cruz, Venezuela in 1995, his mother was Venezuelan (until she was killed in a robbery when Evan was 15 years old), his father Michael, also Venezuelan, spent almost his whole life living in Red County.
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    • Evan was born in Puerto la Cruz, Venezuela, in 1995, h. His mother was

      Venezuelan (until she was killed in a robbery when Evan was 15 years old), h. His father Michael, also Venezuelan, spent almost his whole life living in Red County.
    • Evan was born in Puerto la Cruz, Venezuela in 1995, h. His mother was ¶

      Venezuelan (until she
      , also a native Venezuelan, was killed in a robbery when Evan was 15 years old), hi. Evan's father, Michael, alsowho is also a native Venezuelan, spent almost of his whole life livinglife in Red County.
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  • Sentence 2
    • When Evan's mother died, his father called him and said that he would bring him to Red County in a few weeks, meanwhile he had to stay with his aunt, María.
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    • When Evan's mother died, his father called him and said that he would bring him to Red County in a few weeks, m. Meanwhile, he had to stay with his aunt, María.
    • When Evan's mother died, his father called him and said that he would bring him to Red County in a few weeks, meanwhilbut in the meantime he had to stay with his aunt, María.
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    • Evan's father was a humble carpenter who arrived to Red County looking for job opportunities in the late 99', due the crisis that he saw coming with the victory of Hugo Chavez in the presidential elections.
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    • Evan's father was a humble carpenter who arrived toin Red County looking for
      job opportunities in the late 99'0's, due the crisis that he saw coming with the victory of Hugo Chavez in the presidential elections.
    • Evan's father was, a humble carpenter who arrived to Red County looking for ¶
      job opportunities in the late 99', due the crisis that he saw coming with
      sensed the coming crisis that would follow the victory of Hugo Chavez in the national presidential elections., came to Red County in late 1999 seeking job opportunities.¶

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  • Sentence 5
    • He settled down without problems and carried on his life alone until he called his son.
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    • He settled down without problems and carried on his life alone until he called his sonEvan's father settled in Red County without any difficulty and there lived alone until bringing his son, Evan, to live with him.
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  • Sentence 6
    • Evan's father used to call him to do some carpentry, Evan was the one who carried the wood and because of that he developed a great acquired strength.
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    • Evan's father used to call him to do some carpentry,. Evan was the one who
      carried the wood and because of that he developed a great acquired strength.
    • When Evan's father used to call himbrought Evan along to do some carpentry, Evan was the oney work, it was Evan who
      carried the wood and because of that hethus developed a great acquireddeal of strength.
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    • Evan grew up seeing police series on the television, and he swore himself that he would become one.
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    • Evan grew up seewatching police series on the television, and he swore to himself that he would become one.
    • Evan grew up seeingWhile growing up, Evan liked to watch police series on the television, and he swore himself that he would become oneone day become a police officer.
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  • Sentence 9
    • Something like his mother's death cannot happen again if he can avoid it.
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    • Something like his mother's death cannot happen again if he can avoid itAs a police officer Evan would, if at all possible, strive to prevent the sort of event that resulted in his mother's death.
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