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  • Report about spending some school money

    • Intoduction Being healthy is the best thing you can ever have.
    • Many people study a lot and don't care about themselves for instance they don't do any sports.
    • The same to the pupils in our school.
    • They are too young to understand how health is important for them, so our school have to improve their health.
    • Nowadays there are many activities that they can take up, but the most wanted ones are going white-water rafting or health spa weekends.
    • Making White-water rafting Actually, white-water rafting is extremely interesting kind of activity, but it demand to have quite a strong body.
    • So not many students can do it, and also it costs quite more compare to Health Spa weekend and we're run out of money, so we can't afford it.
  • Many pupils want to do this activity and obviously they would complain about not making this if we didn't.
  • But there are one way to solve this problem, it's to conduct this sport quite rarely.
  • Making Helth Spa Weekend It's not very healthy at all, you won't build your body only by sitting in the spa.
  • But we have physical education in our school, so it's not a big deal.
  • In addition, girls will definitely like whereas boys won't at all, but i think after a bit of time they will.It doesn't cost a lot compare to making white-water rafting that costs a fortune.
  • And it's more relax time, and no one would complain that we do it in their spare time.
  • If someone can't be there, he can be not there.
  • But pupils would definitely not skip it.
  • Recommendation Both ideas have their own downsides and benefits.
  • Spa is quite relax and more suitable for doing after hard week whereas white-water rafting is quite hard to do but it apparently more healthier for your body in terms of building body and making you stronger.As i mentioned before we can't afford conducting lots of hours white-water rafting, so i suggest to choose the second option.
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    • Many people study a lot and don't care about themselves for instance they don't do any sports.
    • Manyost people tend to study a lot and don't care about themselves f. For instance, they don't doplay any sports.
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    • They are too young to understand how health is important for them, so our school have to improve their health.
    • They are too young to understand how health is important for themthe importance of health, so our school haves should take the time to teach them to improve their health.
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    • Nowadays there are many activities that they can take up, but the most wanted ones are going white-water rafting or health spa weekends.
    • Nowadays, there are many activities that they can take up, but. Some of the most wantedpopular ones are going white-water rafting or health spa weekends.
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    • Making White-water rafting Actually, white-water rafting is extremely interesting kind of activity, but it demand to have quite a strong body.
    • Making White-water rafting
      Actually, white-water rafting is extremely interesting kind of activity, but it demand to have quite a strong body
      , while it is an extremely interesting sport, demands a strong body in order to perform well.
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    • So not many students can do it, and also it costs quite more compare to Health Spa weekend and we're run out of money, so we can't afford it.
    • SoThis means that not many students can do it, and. It also it costs quite more in compareison to Ha health Sspa weekend and we're run. As most students are out of money, so we can't it is unafford itable.
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    • In addition, girls will definitely like whereas boys won't at all, but i think after a bit of time they will.It doesn't cost a lot compare to making white-water rafting that costs a fortune.
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    • Spa is quite relax and more suitable for doing after hard week whereas white-water rafting is quite hard to do but it apparently more healthier for your body in terms of building body and making you stronger.As i mentioned before we can't afford conducting lots of hours white-water rafting, so i suggest to choose the second option.
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