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    • School leavers should take a gap year before entering universit

    • Today, in Western countries a gap year is very popular among school leavers.
    • Young people who have just left school decide not to enter the university and take some time to travel and rest.
    • However, is gap year really worth the time and is it necessary at all?
    • In my opinion, although, the university degree gives numerous advantages, people have a choice when they can get it.
    • Firstly, a gap year gives the opportunity to explore the world or take part in volunteer programs.
    • Secondly, the travel experience enriches student's inner world what will help with future career.
    • And finally, a gap year is the best time to self-determination and to search your way of life before you start working.
    • Some opponents might argue that a gap year is waste of time.
    • They suggest that men refuse this opportunity because of conscription into the army.
    • Moreover, many people cannot afford to travel and force to stay at home.
    • Anyway, I do not support the above mentioned ideas.
    • One should remember that a gap year allows student to learn an independent life, develop responsibility for your actions, to face the first real difficulties and learn how to deal with them, and understand why time should be valued.
    • To conclude, I think that school leavers should take a gap year before entering university.
    • And I am convinced that our education needs the overcoming the established traditions and mentality for the sake of the bright future of the nation.

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