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My essay about the children`s crimes. Check it, please)
- Worryingly, juvenile delinquency has been increased more and more.
- Scientists have been argued about reasons for committing crimes.
- One of these (or those?) reasons it is a family.
- In my own opinion, it goes without saying that an atmosphere in the family plays a significant role in the life of every child.
- First and foremost, displaying of cruelty on relation to children can lead to a number of problems with his behavior in the future and it is not except a child will grow violent and ruthless.
- Secondly, a study done by sociologists proved a family had a major influence on children because a lot of children`s crimes committed by teenagers born into adverse families.
- Nevertheless, consider the problem from another side.
- Many people convenience teenagers are pressed by social influence on the whole, but not only a family.
- For example, it is relationship with classmates.
- A bullying pupil may grow cruel and revenge upon offenders.
- I disagree with this point of view because children build up their character in the family from the birth and if you are loved here, you never become a criminal.
- To conclude, I would point out a family into a distinct a society grows up children and only it determines the future of a child: whether child will a criminal or an obedient kid.
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